Surprised – A humorous tale in Simplified

Here is an amusing story I “translated” from Notehand to Simplified. I wanted to share a reading piece for the Simplified readers.

I’m still a new student, so pardon if I didn’t get the translation textbook perfect. I still hope it’s enjoyable reading.
Surprised

You are welcome to give feedback on my shorthand, but be gentle to this newer student, please. 🙂
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  1. Readable, and enjoyable. Even though I'm a DJS person, I could understand this text just fine. Your penmanship needs some work, mostly with proportions ("out" should not be the same height as "doctor", for instance) and smoothness or fluency–but that comes with practice and lots of work with the textbook models.

    Does Simplified not use the t-m blend for "time"?

  2. This is a funny story; I shall get a copy of the Notehand Manual.
    The only problems I can see with the translation are: 'short' which is just 'sh' in Simplified (although I think 'sh t' is better, and is used in DJS); 'time' is the 'tm' blend; and you join 'to perform'; the rule is to use 't' for 'to' before downstrokes. Anyway, well done!

    1. Thanks, jontib. Short as a disjointed sh was indeed two lessons ago for me, and I didn't think of it today. I see where I missed "to perform" now. But I did get "to be." 🙂 I appreciate the feedback.

    2. I agree, great story. I was laughing at the end, LOL.

      Yes, "time" and "short" are brief forms: tem blend and the sh stroke written above the line, respectively. So "short time" is written as sh (over the line) tem blend, close together (the blend starting just below the sh).

      Your writing is very legible. I like the way you maintain the proportion of the circle vowels, the n and the m, and the forward curves. For the consonants, make the sh and the s very small.

      Looks good!

  3. Hi Lee, I'm glad you could read it, and enjoyed it. Notehand has much more interesting material than the Simplified manuals, for sure.

    Simplified does introduce time as a brief form, but I see that it's three lessons away from me yet, so I wasn't familiar with it. 🙂

    1. I saw those, but what I've looked at seems to use all the principles and I haven't gotten through the entire manual yet. I just looked at the Gimmick story today, and I can decipher more than I could two weeks ago, but not all. I figured I should wait until I've covered more of the manual and try then. Thanks though!

  4. I have to admit, I wrote this three times to get a version that I would be pleased to post. However it was good practice for my penmanship.

    Does anyone think I don't slant enough? My normal handwriting doesn't slant much either, so I suppose it carries over.

    I have mostly been using a Pilot v5, a .5 mm rollerball. When I use a ballpoint pen I seem to press too hard. I have to work on a relaxed hand, as I get sore when writing, although less so than with longhand.

    1. In my opinion, it is easier to maintain the proportions of the vertical characters with some slant because you will have more diagonal space to write the strokes. If you write too vertical, your writing space narrows. However, I have seen people writing vertically that still are able to maintain proportion. You have to experiment to find out what works best for you. The important thing is proportion.

    2. Oh, I forgot something to nitpick. The word "inside" is written with a left s. In general, after an n, m, d, or t, we use the left s, not the right s, because it would cause an odd angle. There are some exceptions to this rule, but it holds in the majority of cases.

    3. Ah. I've noticed that "decision" uses the right s and must be an exception to this rule. I had wondered why it was. I am still hoping which "s" to use becomes instinct over time because I don't always pick the correct one.

      With "inside" I also left off the initial vowel, because I thought the n makes it redundant. I couldn't tell you where I picked up that principle, although I suppose it's because n is a brief form for "in." Which explains why "impress" uses that initial vowel, come to think of it. 🙂

    4. "Impress" does not use the initial vowel either. In general, im- and in- are written without the vowel because the prefix comes from a brief form. The initial circle vowel is added in im- and in- only if a vowel follows the consonant, for example, "imagine", "inept", etc. This is done to increase legibility.

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